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Sep 18Liked by Slope of Hope

Very nice start, Tim. It has me hooked.

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Sep 16Liked by Slope of Hope

Good start with the smell bit!

Nice product idea InSight!


I would change in one sentence…



It would be difficult to characterize the exact nature of the bouquet, since the fragrance was an unpredictable combination of materials…  

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It would be difficult to characterize the exact nature of the fragrance since it was an unpredictable combination of materials… 



Otherwise off to a perfect start, Tim! Look forward to the next chapter.

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I like it! Keeps those suggestions coming as the chapters tumble out.

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Sep 16Liked by Slope of Hope

Great first Chapter !! Your writing style is captivating. Looking forward to tomorrow's chapter.

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Thanks, Ken. I appreciate that!

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Sep 16Liked by Slope of Hope

You have me hooked, Tim! A small correction. You need 3 pilots for long international trip in your Gulfstream, not 2. And there’s a sleeping area for a pilot in the Gulfstream 650.

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I never would have known that, thank you! I'll make that tweak!

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Nice way to get edits. I like that. :)

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Sep 16Liked by Slope of Hope

Excellent start, intriguing.

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Sep 16Liked by Slope of Hope

Grabs your attention! Looking forward to being a Davos insider…

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I’m delighted that the first chapter has come out and I look forward to hearing your reactions.

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